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Johnny Spoke in School Today by ~Greenwolf103:iconGreenwolf103:





In the corner of the classroom
Is where Johnny always sat.
With no one to ever swap notes with.
No one to look at.

His clothes were always black-
That's what was all the same.
But the surprise to all on that cold day
Was when Johnny said his name.

Johnny spoke in school today.
He'd always been the quiet one.
But today he stood to say something.
Something never done.

The teacher got real quiet,
The kids would only stare.
And Johnny would just turn away
And curl up in his chair.

Never had a friend or foe-
Johnny went through life alone.
But I wanted to know what brought the change.
I later went down to his home.

His dad was very angry.
Johnny's blood was on the floor.
His dad was beating him and telling him
To never speak up anymore.

Johnny spoke in school today-
It happened just one time.
He never spoke a word again.
He'd been taught that speaking was a crime.

Johnny spoke in school today-
The one day he broke away.
But Johnny never spoke again
Because his father made him pay.

COPYRIGHT 2005 BY DAWN COLCLASURE
©2005-2010 ~Greenwolf103
:icongreenwolf103:

Author's Comments

This poem is based on a short story I wrote in college (for creative writing). This poem REALLY made me sad and I almost cried at the end. Almost because I know it's not a true story, but the case of child abuse is...

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:icongreenwolf103:
Reading it like that now DID make me cry.... :cry:

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:iconnaked-kookie:
wow that is sad!!!!!!!....*wipes eyes* but was really good! :)
:icongingerbreadxcoffin:
How sad, and wow, very strict father for not letting his child speak at all, but this does* happen, the end gave me chills, this is very heartbraking piece, amazing work

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peace in AMEHIKAAAH! :peace:
:iconsynner666:
Wow, I really liked this Dawn. It reminds me of a Pearl Jam song. "Jeremy"

Really sad song

At home, drawing pictures of mountain tops
With him on top lemin yellow sun, arms raised in a v
And the dead lay in pools of maroon below
Daddy didn’t give attention
Oh, to the fact that mommy didn’t care
King jeremy the wicked...oh, ruled his world...
Jeremy spoke in class today...

Clearly I remember pickin’ on the boy
Seemed a harmless little fuck
Ooh, but we unleashed a lion...
Gnashed his teeth and bit the recess lady’s breast...
How can I forget?
And he hit me with a surprise left
My jaw left hurtin’...ooh, dropped wide open
Just like the day...oh, like the day I heard

Daddy didn’t give affection, no...
And the boy was something that mommy wouldn’t wear
King jeremy the wicked...oh, ruled his world
Jeremy spoke in class today...
Try to forget this...try to forget this...
Try to erase this...try to erase this...
]from the blackboard...

Jeremy spoke in class today...

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:icongreenwolf103:
Thank you SO MUCH, Nathan, Milly and Als!!! :hug: :hug: :hug:

Yes, I think the father was overly strict.

Als, I remember seeing the video for that song. It was never closed-captioned and so I never knew what it was really about (just thought it was about a kid who snapped). Very sad. :(

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:iconwhitefeathered-raven:
Aw, very sad. I like the rhyme in this, it's smooth. I like the last verse, but I also think that the poem would go out with a little more of a bang (even thought it still did). But all in all it's really nice, sad, but nice.:)
:icongreenwolf103:
Thank you!! :hug:

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:iconthornyenglishrose:
Wow, so sinister, and made particularly so with the contrast of the simple rhyme and structure. It's almost like you wrote it for a child, making the twist even more shocking - very good technique.
:icongreenwolf103:
Thank you so much. :hug: No, it wasn't written for a child. But it does highlight child abuse so in a way, the simpleness of the poem symbolizes the innocence of a child. I appreciate the feedback. :)

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