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Counting the Times by ~Greenwolf103:iconGreenwolf103:

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I'm counting the times
I've picked up the phone.
Then changed my mind, thinking,
He's probably not at home.

I'm counting the times
We got to meet.
But that hasn't been a picture
That's been made complete.

I'm counting the times
I've wanted to send a nice note.
But then I remember the words
In that letter he wrote.

I'm counting the times
We said how we feel.
But it's only a feeling;
It's not something made real.


COPYRIGHT 2006 BY DAWN COLCLASURE
©2006-2010 ~Greenwolf103
:icongreenwolf103:

Author's Comments

Mostly true but some elements of fiction are in here because they don't apply. I didn't want them to; the fact that it reflected my own life to the letter unnerved me.

This pretty much sums up the difference between fantasy and reality. Me, I prefer the reality. But sometimes life gets in the way and keeps everything held up. :cry:

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~nakeddancingllama Jan 29, 2006, 3:24:32 AM
Well, this is a really nice poem. Kinda sad but really nice :-) :hug:

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:butterflytwo: Sweetest Downfall :butterflytwo:
:icongingerbreadxcoffin:
~GingerbreadxCoffin Jan 29, 2006, 3:44:19 AM
hmm, it is like loving someone and not being able to tell them it, not coming out? i see, interesting and sad

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klaha thinks he's a ghost...



prints :pointl: :thumbsup:


peace in AMEHIKAAAH! :peace:
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~everythinglost13 Jan 29, 2006, 11:00:22 AM
I love your work... you are such an amazing writer...

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Slit my throat and end my beginning,
Destroy my soul and kill me slowly...
I would rather be tortured a million times over...
Then have her taken away...
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~softcell72 Jan 29, 2006, 1:59:08 PM
very beautiful, and romantic in a sad sort of way.

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change is good, you go first.
Light travels faster than sound, which is why a person can appear bright, until they open their mouth.
hating me won't make you pretty.
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~sweetillusions Jan 29, 2006, 8:24:01 PM
This poem is great, I can relate to it..unfortunately, but very nice...

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_-TheOneAndOnly-_
~ErikaYvonne~

"Everything has beauty, just not everyone sees it"- Confucious
:icongreenwolf103:
~Greenwolf103 Jan 31, 2006, 3:10:46 PM
Thank you. :) :hug:

--
Pick your poison:
[link] or [link]
Don't talk shit unless you're prepared to eat it.
:icongreenwolf103:
~Greenwolf103 Jan 31, 2006, 3:12:22 PM
Yes that's exactly what it's like. Thank you for the feedback. :)

--
Pick your poison:
[link] or [link]
Don't talk shit unless you're prepared to eat it.
:icongreenwolf103:
~Greenwolf103 Jan 31, 2006, 3:19:53 PM
Wow, thank you! That is very kind. :)

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Pick your poison:
[link] or [link]
Don't talk shit unless you're prepared to eat it.
:icongreenwolf103:
~Greenwolf103 Jan 31, 2006, 3:21:52 PM
Thank you. Yes, I agree.

--
Pick your poison:
[link] or [link]
Don't talk shit unless you're prepared to eat it.
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